Raw Earth Ink
spit, mixed with dirt – muddy words flow
Atrophy
tender and rare blue flower
the forget-me-not is fading
no longer vibrant and bold
no longer delicate and precious
the vase sits
a water-ring along its lip
just one in amongst the others
your hand lifts them out
tosses them away no second glance
replaced by an energetic lily instead
her perfume is heady
delicate lips call for a hungry touch
her clothing magnificent
the forget-me-not lies wasted
once she was cherished
she was perceived and gazed upon
her beauty simple and not complex
without loving care she withered
passed over for another’s extravagance
tara caribou | ©2019-2021
Read more like this in my poetry book, Fallen Star Rising.
36 Comments on “Atrophy”
Raw Earth Ink 
It is a very beautiful. Though, maybe so simple in its beauty, extreme in complexity.
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Perhaps.
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The flower is the best place for my nose. Really nicely presented. Loved it.
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Thank you. I’m glad you liked it.
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You are welcome.
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Yeah, there’s always another flower. And another, and another . . .
This is formatted perfectly. The flow is immaculate.
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It sure seems that way. Thank you.
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You’re welcome.
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Brilliant Tara, very clever. Loved your comparisons. Brilliant!
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Thanks so much
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Very thought-provoking, with some great imagery here!
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Thanks Tom
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❤ Love this.
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Thanks Michael
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Absolutely gorgeous 💙💙💙
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Thanks DA
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You’re very welcome ❤🌹
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This is another masterpiece….you’re simply evolving, I sense….
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Thanks so much Navin. I appreciate your kindness.
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You’re welcome Tara….
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This pulled my heartstrings, absolutely gorgeous writing.
Enigma 🙂 ❤
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I sure appreciate that, thank you.
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I prefer forget-me-nots. ❤
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So do I…simply the best and simple is just beautiful
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Agreed!
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Me too. I have forget-me-not tattoo but I don’t think I’ll ever get a lily tattoo.
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Truly beautiful.
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Thank you so much.
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It is a true description of the feeling of being abandoned/discarded/neglected
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Absolutely. Or at least the perception of it.
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Beautifully ode to a forget me not! Nice write
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Thanks Jay
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Beautiful!!
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Thank you ☺️
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Beautifully written.
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Thanks for stopping by, Jude. Always appreciated.
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